Dad is a very strong man.
My father and I live by each other.
Since I was born, it seems that only this man is around me. As the cocoons on his hands thicken layer by layer, I grew up day by day on the rickety boat.
My father is a kind ferry operator, so people in the village say. I've always felt so proud.
Because he ferry just to let every village people cross the river safely, and never charge a cent, so my father and I live on that acre of land. Though I was living a hard life, my father made every effort to keep me warm and well fed. I think as long as I have my father, I am a happy child.
One day, however, a strange woman suddenly stood outside the cabin. My father asked me to call her "aunt". From then on, the "aunt" lived in our narrow cabin. She laughs at everyone. Every time my father is on the ferry, she will wipe his sweat and hand him water.
But I don't like her. She takes up too much attention from my father, which makes me feel left out. So I tried my best to throw away the things she gave me, not to wear the clothes she made, not to eat the food she made. But in doing so, not only did I not get my father's concern greetings, but he also glared at me fiercely, asking me to listen to her words. Looking at the tears on aunt's face, I was at a loss, and at the same time added inexplicable anger.
Finally one day, I pushed "Auntie" into the whirlpool of the water half deliberately and half by half. My father jumped madly into the river and picked up the dying "aunt".
"Am I your daughter?" As my father's slap fell, I screamed out.
"You are not my daughter! She's your mother! " The blue tendons on dad's face burst up and shouted at me.
I turned my head to look at her in bed, stupidly. For a long time, dad said:
"Ten years ago, I was a young man working outside. Because of my low education, I couldn't even fill my stomach. So he was so disillusioned that he drank a few bottles of wine and began to jump into the river in a daze. It was very dark at that time, I thought no one knew, but your own father, the original owner of the ship, tried his best to save me ashore, but he was swept away by the surging river! At that time, she was your mother. Holding you for a month, she lost her mind. She left you in the cabin and then disappeared After the river wash, wake up I only see you in the cabin. It's my fault. It's I who broke up your wonderful family. Your own father saved me with kindness, and let me know that it's not a pity that people can't live only for themselves, or even lose their lives in order to help others! "
Dad broke down in tears. He said that he took up the oars and crossed the river day by day. I can finally understand why he would jump down the river so desperately every time to save the drowning people, or even just the drowning objects. He is with a grateful heart to face everything around him.
"Your father's spirit has always inspired me. I raised you up, looked for your mother everywhere, begged for her forgiveness, and waited for her return with my heart and time. I am really your father! " My father clenched aunt's hand.
"I always remember your father's help. He taught me to love and help others!"
My father is a ferryman.
My dads are great ferries.
Famous teachers' comments
It seems that we can't find any obvious faults (the sentence "my dads are great ferrymen" is interesting) or give them a good score, but we won't think it's a good "masterpiece" in our hearts. What's the problem? Or what is missing? Shi Tiesheng said in "I and Ditan" that "the zero degree of writing is the starting point of life, the place from which writing starts is the inherent difficulty of life, and the ultimate pursuit of writing is the initial vision of soul." Therefore, writing can be said to look at the soul, and the purpose of writing should be to express ideas and express true feelings. As a small novel, although fiction is allowed, the author's feelings should still be true, and the design of the plot can not show the disadvantages of "false, big and empty". However, this article obviously gives people a sense of "distortion", especially "one day, I pushed my aunt into the vortex of water half intentionally and half by half".
There are also small problems in expression, such as "I wake up only to see you in the cabin after the river wash" and "it's me that makes your beautiful family break" and so on, which should be modified.