平淡其外 绚烂其内

2020-09-21 阅读 : 279 次

上海高考作文命题一向有引领全国的美誉。

Shanghai college entrance examination composition proposition has always been leading the national reputation.

今年,上海卷忽然一个美丽的翻腾,回到纯然淡然的命题作文上,回到似乎小学生都可以写的题目上:我想握住你的手。然而,平淡其外,绚烂其内。“想”、“握手”、“你”三个主词,便是绚烂的机巧与洞天所在。

This year, Shanghai volume suddenly a beautiful toss, back to the pure and indifferent proposition composition, back to the topic that seems to be written by primary school students: I want to hold your hand. However, it is plain outside and gorgeous inside. "Think", "shake hands" and "you" are the three main words of gorgeous ingenuity and the cave.

“想”是题挈。“想”既决定了由想生发的文章纲目,也设定了文章的重心不在如何“握手”和“握手”结果,而在“握手”动机的由来。这个由来或隐含着刻骨铭心的故事,或交织着难以言表的愧疚、感激,或蕴藏着与时俱进的启迪、感悟。“想”作为认知、思想、情志生发的意念载体,暗示了有一番心路要叙,有一根情弦要拨,有一方智窗要开。“想”是命题的机巧所在,也是本文情蕴和个性所在。淡化“想”,甚至丢弃“想”,直接演绎“握住你的手”如何如何,难免偏失。

"Think" is the topic. "Think" not only determines the outline of the article, but also sets the focus of the article not on how to "shake hands" and "shake hands" results, but on the origin of "shake hands" motivation. The origin of this story is either implicit in the deep-rooted story, or intertwined with unspeakable guilt and gratitude, or contains the enlightenment and perception of advancing with the times. "Thinking", as the carrier of cognition, thought and emotion, implies that there is a way of mind to narrate, a chord to pluck and a window of wisdom to open. "Thinking" is not only the cleverness of the proposition, but also the emotion and personality of this paper. Desalinate "think", even discard "think", directly deduce "hold your hand" how, inevitable partial loss.

再者,“握”是手紧紧攥住,这个行为发自内心,或出于愧疚,或出于感激,或出于坚定。“握”需要“想”的厚实铺垫,“握”的是手,贴的是“身”,连的是“心”,无真诚之心,无真切之情,无真实之思,手是“握”不住的,字面上堆砌的“握”再多,也貌合神离,苍白无力。仅此而言,今年上海卷作文审题上难度并不小。

Moreover, "holding" means holding hands tightly. This behavior comes from the heart, or from guilt, or from gratitude, or from firmness. "Holding" needs a thick bedding of "thinking", which means "holding" hands, sticking to "body", connecting with "heart", no sincere heart, no real feelings, no real thoughts, and the hands are "holding" unstoppable. No matter how many "holding" are literally piled up, they are also seemingly detached and powerless. In this case, it is not easy to examine the composition of Shanghai volume this year.

“握手”是题魂。汉民族赋予“握手”的精神内涵与审美情趣尤其丰富,选择“握手”为作文契机,开辟了无限可联系、可想象、可创造的情理交融的美好空间。

"Handshake" is the theme of soul. The Han nationality endows "handshake" with rich spiritual connotation and aesthetic taste. Choosing "handshake" as an opportunity for composition, it opens up a beautiful space of infinite connection, imagination and creation.

握手传递情谊。手传出的是呵护是理解是支持,手承接的是温馨是情谊是信念。两千多年前唱出的“执子之手,与子偕老”(《诗经邶风》),依然是今天建立和谐社会最美的乐音和最令人盼望的愿景。

Shake hands to convey friendship. What the hand spreads out is to care is to understand is to support, what the hand carries on is to warm is to love is to believe. More than two thousand years ago, the most beautiful music and the most hopeful vision of building a harmonious society today is "holding the hand of the son and growing old with the son" (the book of songs and the wind).

握手彰显境界。握手可见文明,握手可知感恩;握手可见真诚,握手可知气度;握手可见坚定,握手可知修养;握手可见智慧,握手可知勇毅;握手可见现在,握手可知未来。“握手”将暴露当今青少年情感世界的苍白,有利于促进后来者加强心灵滋养,提高品德形象。握手看来很感性,其实行为心役,感性是花,理性是根,根深方有花明。没有思想的深度,握手也只是平平,难见迷人的风景。

Handshake shows the state. Handshake shows civilization, handshake shows gratitude; handshake shows sincerity, handshake shows bearing; handshake shows firmness, handshake shows accomplishment; handshake shows wisdom, handshake shows courage; handshake shows present, handshake shows future. "Handshake" will expose the pallor of today's youth's emotional world, which is conducive to promoting the later to strengthen the spiritual nourishment and improve the moral image. Handshake seems to be very perceptual, in fact, the behavior of mental servitude, perceptual is flower, rational is root, deep root is flower. There is no depth of thought, and the handshake is just plain. It's hard to see the charming scenery.

手可以是个体的,也可以是群体乃至国家、人类的。可从感恩、感激的角度,写回报父母的亲情,写回复友人的友情,写扶危济贫的人间真情,写同舟共济的同事情;更可以换个角度,理性地对待竞争对手,写感激对手互促双赢的豪情。可以取材于现代人,也可以取材于古人,写想象中与古代英杰握手受激励的情景。

Hands can be individual, group, country and human. From the perspective of gratitude and gratitude, we can write about the family feelings of parents, the friendship of friends, the real feelings of people who help the poor and the needy, and the feelings of colleagues who work together in the same boat; we can also change our perspective, treat competitors rationally, and write about the passion of appreciating competitors to promote win-win situation. It can be drawn from modern people, or from the ancients. It can write the situation of shaking hands and being inspired with the ancient heroes in imagination.

握的对象“你”可以是人,也可以是物,甚至是抽象虚拟的手。比如,从建立环境友好型社会的高度,人类真该紧紧握住大自然的手。

The object "you" can be a person, a thing, or even an abstract virtual hand. For example, from the height of building an environment-friendly society, human beings should hold the hand of nature tightly.

从文题的结构形式看,“我想握住你的手”陈述对象是“我”,“我”是主动者,“握住你的手”体现出超前筹谋、积极主动的开放、自信、大度、成熟的气魄。这与海纳百川,追求卓越的上海城市精神暗合。上海已经紧紧握住长三角之手,同时肩负着“服务全国,带动周边”的共同发展使命。业已成功举行的“上合组织”国际大会,尤其是2010年的世博会,更是上海―――中国紧握世界之手的精彩绽放!

From the structural form of the essay, the statement object of "I want to hold your hand" is "I", "I" is the initiative, "hold your hand" reflects the spirit of ahead planning, active opening, self-confidence, magnanimity and maturity. This coincides with the spirit of Shanghai, which embraces all rivers and pursues excellence. Shanghai has firmly grasped the hand of the Yangtze River Delta, and at the same time shoulders the common development mission of "serving the whole country and driving the surrounding areas". The International Conference of the SCO, especially the 2010 World Expo, has been held successfully. It is also a wonderful blooming of Shanghai - China holding the hand of the world!

“我想”这种话语方式,也与青少年喜欢的网络自由博客的话语方式契合,给考生以心理适应感和安全感,有利于调动学生倾吐的兴趣与写作的热情,体现了以生为本的新课程理念。这种打破变着法子端架子、编故事、搞高深游戏而真正贴近考生的命题,未尝不是一种出新。

"I think" is a kind of discourse mode, which is also in line with the discourse mode of Internet free blog that teenagers like. It gives examinees a sense of psychological adaptation and security, which is conducive to arousing students' interest and enthusiasm for writing, and embodies the new curriculum concept of student-oriented. This kind of proposition, which is really close to the examinee by breaking the way of putting on airs, making up stories and playing advanced games, is not a new one.

总之,大千世界一“手”牵,无限风光“想握”间。好作文,不在于装奇饰新,而在于可亲可写,可判可分。犹如“一件小事”为题,童稚可作,鲁迅也作,然而鲁迅的《一件小事》照样成为传世之作。

In a word, there is a "hand" to hold in the vast world, and an infinite scenery "to hold". A good composition does not consist in making new decorations, but in being able to write and judge. As if "a small matter" is the topic, it can be done by childishness and Lu Xun, but Lu Xun's "a small matter" is still handed down.

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